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For as writing theorists often note, writing is generally not a process in which we start with a fully formed idea in our heads that we then simply transcribe in an unchanged state onto the page. On the contrary, writing is more often a means of discovery in which we use the writing process to figure out what our idea is. This is why writers are often surprised to find that what they end up with on the page is quite different from what they thought it would be when they started. What we are trying to say here is that everydayspeak is often crucial for this discovery process, that translating your ideas into more common, simpler terms can help you figure out what your ideas really are, as opposed to what you initially imagined they were. Even Descartes, for example, may not have had the formulation “I think, therefore I am” in mind before he wrote the passage above; instead, he may have arrived at it as he worked through the writing process.
Dress It Up:
For as writing theorists often note, the writing process is not a process in which the writer commences a piece with a completed and thoroughly formed theory that is transcribed in an unchanged state onto the page. Contrariwise, actively writing enables writers to identify the central theme of the piece. For this reason, writers are repeatedly amazed when assessing their final argument, in relation to the contrast from their initial argument. Alternatively stated, common informal language is often imperative for this discovery process, thus translating themes into elementary terms assists the writer in constructing concepts, as opposed to what they were formerly believed to be. One could strongly argue that famed French philosopher, mathematician, and scientist, Rene Descartes, did not form “I think, therefore I am” in his mind before writing “Discourse on the Method, Part IV”, instead, he may have generated this statement through informal writing.
Dress It Down:
Writing theorists often say that writing is not a process in which we start with a fully formed idea in our heads that we are ready to write down. On the contrary, we actually figure out what our idea is when we start writing it down. This is why writers are often surprised to find that what they end up with on the page is quite different from what they thought it would be when they started. In other words, using everdayspeak is important in figuring out what your ideas actually are, instead of what you thought they were initially. Even Descartes may not have thought of “I think, therefore I am” before he started writing, and it instead came to him during the writing process.
Reading the informal paragraph took me about 10 seconds because it was as though I was having a normal conversation, but when reading a paragraph that is super dressed up and formal, it is much harder to quickly digest. The formal paragraph leaves a good imprint, but the informal one does a good job of communicating the message in a very quick and efficient method. A combination of the two would be a perfect blend.
My favorite paragraph was your “Dress It Down” paragraph. The way you used simple words allowed me to easily decipher what you were saying. I noticed that your “Dress It Up” paragraph had a lot of big nice-sounding words that could easily make a paragraph harder to understand. Overall both paragraphs are really good pieces of writing that in the end leave you understanding what is being said.
My favorite paragraph was your “Dress It Down” paragraph. The way you used simple words allowed me to easily decipher what you were saying. I noticed that your “Dress It Up” paragraph had a lot of big nice-sounding words that could easily make a paragraph harder to understand. Overall, both paragraphs are really good pieces of writing that in the end leave you understanding what is being said.